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What do you think about this short story written by me ? Hipster Slut 19/07/05(Fri)20:37 No. 17998

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Here you can read it :

https://pl.scribd.com/document/415720215/Playing-With-a-Futurology

Hipster Slut 19/08/12(Mon)06:47 No. 18004

>>17998
I'm not smart enough to tell you how to improve this but it at the moment it is very generic.

Hipster Slut 19/08/24(Sat)00:25 No. 18018

You have trouble with emphasis. The amount of detail you describe things in isn't according to overall narrative significance, but rather what you find to be the most interesting on a moment to moment basis.

This is not a smart way of writing. It results in the reader fixating on random background noise while important story details get completely missed.

Hipster Slut 19/09/20(Fri)09:41 No. 18025

Your story is not bad for reading. I think i am bad in writing own compositions. I need more practise in expressing own minds and points of view. Now i sometimes use help with writing essays in rushessay review here https://topessayguiders.com/rushessay-review/

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