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Anonymous 13/09/24(Tue)10:20 No. 19769 ID: 839487

This is one of the best loli stories i've ever read. Keep going op!


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Anonymous 13/09/24(Tue)21:58 No. 19770 ID: 050b55

More op?
Yeah?
Please?
For me?


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OP!!L1ZTV3LGZl 13/09/25(Wed)02:03 No. 19771 ID: 61bc43

>>19770

Sorry, I exceeded my quota for story updates for the next six months. See you all again in March!






I kid, I kid. Next update will be soon, while I'm still in the mood to write.

So, does everyone like how it's going so far?


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this is fucking gold Anonymous 13/09/25(Wed)04:49 No. 19772 ID: b2de25

>>19771
you glorious man you, i've been re-reading this non stop and im sure 90% of the people in this thread is enjoying this as much as i am.
the pacing is brilliant and the build up is frustrating but still an awesome feeling. i wish you a precious future and if you'd please, continue with this fine piece of literature as soon as possible.


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Rain 13/09/25(Wed)09:00 No. 19773 ID: 48eeef

>>19771
Hells yes I do. Get to it my man.


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Anonymous 13/09/26(Thu)11:29 No. 19778 ID: 102d27

Fantastic so far.


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Anonymous 13/09/26(Thu)19:46 No. 19779 ID: 85f6e7

this is the best story on this website!! You are my hero, OP!


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Anonymous 13/09/27(Fri)17:55 No. 19784 ID: a29379

MOAR

pls

pls

i suk dik


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OP!!L1ZTV3LGZl 13/09/29(Sun)03:19 No. 19795 ID: 61bc43

After dinner, I let the fire die out and unrolled my sleeping bag and stripped down to my boxers. I helped Sara set up her blankets, since she didn't have a sleeping bag, and I let her use the foam pad I normally put under my bag. She changed into her night shirt and pulled her pants off, then wiggled under her mound of blankets and enjoyed the novelty of reading by a flashlight for the first time. I pulled out my battered copy of Ringworld and started reading it.

After a while, Sara fell asleep and I turned her flashlight off and set her book aside, then turned my flashlight off and just lay there in the dark listening to the crickets chirp. Today had been absolutely amazing, beyond my wildest expectations, and there was still the next two days to look forward to, but... Funny how when you're alone (more or less) in the dark, you start feeling guilty. I'd allowed- no, encouraged- an 11 year old girl to jerk me off. I might have gotten off the hook for letting her touch my penis before, maybe even for touching her labia, but letting her give me a handjob until I ejaculated? There was no way in hell any jury was going to let me slide on that one. If she told anyone, I was going to prison, no ifs, ands, or buts. Then when I got out, I'd end up homeless because they don't let registered sex offenders live within a certain distance of a school (have you ever seen a map that shows every school in your town? It's nearly impossible to comply with that law, unless you become homeless and live in an underpass or the remote wilderness.), and I'd grow a beard and be the creeper all the moms at the park warned their kids not to talk to.

I don't know how late I stayed up worrying, but somehow I eventually drifted off to sleep without realizing it.

The next morning it was chilly, and I got the fire started again and toasted some pop-tarts over the fire. About the time they were ready, Sara crawled out of the tent, still in her night shirt and panties, and sat on the log we used for a bench, rubbing the sleep out of her eyes and then making a vain attempt at fixing her messy hair, which stuck out in all directions. She looked cute and funny at the same time, knees drawn up to her chest and nibbling on pop-tarts by the fire.

After breakfast, Sara got dressed and joined me when I announced I was going on a grand adventure into the wilderness. We marched off, I designated myself Dr. Livingstone and her Stanley, and we began exploring.

She found a few flowers she liked, but was disappointed when I forbid her from picking them; one had poisonous sap, and another was sort of rare and we were trying to encourage it to grow on our land. I helped her make a daisy chain from some sort of little pink flowers that grew all over the place though, and she wore it was a necklace.

We then went deeper into the woods, following an animal trail, and I showed her where part of the hill had collapsed in a landslide decades ago, making a rock cliff that was embedded with fossils. She thought the fossilized seashells were cool, and I carefully climbed up the wall, nearly fell twice when it crumbled under me, and pried one out of the crumbly rock and tossed it down to her. She thought it was really neat, and I was cool for being brave enough to climb up there and get it for her.

We were taking another route back toward camp, Sara chattering away about some cartoon I'd never heard of, when I slipped on some loose rocks and skidded off the trail and down the hill, tumbling as I went. Sara yelped, then idiotically dove down the hill after me. We both ended up fifteen or twenty feet down the hill from the trail, landing in a muddy hog wallow. Fortunately, there were no hogs present; wild pigs are dangerous and aggressive, and I didn't have anything more than a pocket knife to fend one off with if it attacked.

Unfortunately, we were both scraped and bruised, and covered in black mud. We both laughed at each other, I helped Sara to her feet, then she panicked and I helped her search for her fossil until she found it had been in her pocket the entire time.

"Man, we're filthy! We'd better go wash this off and get some clean clothes."

So we trotted down the trail toward pond, and as soon as I arrived on the dock I sat down and began undressing. Sara stood there for a long moment, hesitating, and I think she was nervous about a repeat of yesterday. I was nearly naked before reluctantly began undressing.

I waited for her to undress, then pointed out a small lizard on the edge of the dock. She surprised me by lunging at it, trying to catch it, but it was far too fast for her and she ended up grabbing at the ground where it had been. She laughed and wiped her hand on her face, leaving a streak of red clay.

Hmmm.

I squatted down and examined the red soil by the dock, then got a glob of the stuff on the end of my finger. Then I startled her by reaching and quickly drawing two red stripes under each of her eyes.

"What are you doing?"

"Watch."

Then I painted a stripe under each of my eyes, held up my hand, and solemnly intoned "how, kemosabe!"

She giggled and immediately suggested we pretend we were indians, which I thought sounded fun, so I told her to leave her flower necklace on and retrieve her feather and the pond could wait.

Sara frowned for a moment at that.

"Shouldn't we get dressed then?"

"Nah. Most indians were naked, or mostly naked. Haven't you seen them in movies or in pictures, where the only clothes they had were loinclothes and moccasins?"

This was logical to her, so she ran back to the tent, ouching and owing as she stepped on various hard and poky objects, retrieved the turkey feather she'd found the day before, and ran back to join me.

"Better put shoes on; they'll be our moccasins."

So we both put our shoes on, she stuck the feather into her hair, and decided we needed more war paint. I took a glob of black mud from the toe of my shoe and painted a line down my chin and a dot on each cheek, and she drew red wavy lines down each of my arms and a black stripe down each leg. I had her turn around while I used red clay to draw little butterfly wings on her back, then got a little gutsy and drew stripes down her spine and onto her butt cheeks, making her giggle.

"Turn around."

Then I drew a circle around her belly button and added wavy lines radiating out from it, like a sun, and a little red circle around nipple while drew alternating red and black stripes across my chest, a black line across my forehead, and a red line down the length of my nose.

Filthy, naked, and daubed in colored "paint", and her with a feather in her hair and a necklace of flowers, we really did look like savages. Pale white savages, but savages nonetheless.

We then set off to find proper sticks to make into spears, and spent the next couple hours running through the woods naked, going "woo woo woo!" and chasing imaginary buffalo through the woods. I'd never run while naked before, and having my dangly bits flop around so much was disconcerting at first, but I quickly got used to it; having fun distracts you from such things.

Finally, we were both too hot and tired, the day having warmed up as the sun rose higher in the sky, and we stuck our spears into the dirt and returned to the pond to wash the sweat and dirt off of our naked bodies.

Stepping onto the dock, I stopped to stretch and as soon as Sara got within range I yelled "raaaaarrrr!" and scooped her up into my arms and started tickling her while she giggled. Then, as suddenly as I'd started, I froze.

"Oh no!"

"What?"

"I sank your battleship."

"Wha-"

I threw her into the pond before she could ask what I was talking about and she popped back to the surface shrieking and laughing. I dove in after her and we washed all the dirt off of ourselves before swimming around for a short while. We didn't stay in long before climbing back onto the dock and lying down to dry. There was no breeze today, so it was consistently warm while we dried.

After a while, we were both pretty much dry, except for our still-damp hair, and Sara rolled onto her belly and turned to face me. I stayed on my back, resting my head on my arms, and admired the gentle curve of her butt as she raised her feet and slowly kicked them back and forth in the air.

"So does it only get hard when it feels good? Your penis, I mean?"

"That's not the only time, no, but it always gets hard when it feels good."

"How come?"

I thought about my answer for a second, then replied, "It feels better when it's hard."

"So how come it isn't always hard then?"

"Well, if it was always hard, it'd be pretty difficult to put pants on, wouldn't it?"

She laughed and propped herself up on her elbows, resting her chin in one hand. Her feet continued to kick above her.

"Can I touch it again?"

Short answer: Yes. Long answer: Hell yes. Longer answer: I'm going to hell for this, but yes.

"Sure," I said.

There was no hesitation this time. She reached out with her free hand and felt it up and down, then her touch migrated down to curiously fondle my balls again.

"So these make that gross stuff?"

"Semen? Yes."

"And then when it feels really good, they squirt that stuff out your penis?"

Close enough. "Yup."

She scrunched her face in a comical expression of distaste.

"What's it for?"

This again. I guess there was no avoiding the birds-and-bees talk, when it came to letting little girls fondle your junk.

"It makes babies."

"It does?" she said, startled.

"Uh-huh."

"How does it do that?"

"It's... complicated."

Brushing her hair back from her face, she looked at me and asked if she could see it again.

"My semen?"

"Yeah."

A little voice in my head was screaming at me that this was wrong, but it was quickly and brutally murdered by my ecstatic sex drive taking advantage of the opportunity.

"Well, it can't come out unless I have an orgasm."

"That's when it feels really good, right?"

"Right. And you have to get it hard first."

"Can you make it hard then?"

"Not on my own," I said, a little white lie. "You'll have to do it for me."

She bit her lip, gazing at my limp penis, then seemed to make up her mind.

"Ok."

Hell yes. I directed her to sit up, her hip touching mine, and showed her what to do again. She gently took my penis into her soft touch and began jerking. Which, given that I was completely flaccid, didn't do a whole lot; I flopped out of her grip several times.

"It's not working."

She just hadn't fondled me long enough, but I immediately took advantage of the opportunity it presented.

"Sometimes you have to do something special to get it started."

"Like what?"

"Kiss it."

"What?!"

"Yeah, you just kiss it."

"Gross!"

"How is it gross?"

"It's your penis!"

"So? Girls do it all the time."

"Seriously?"

"Seriously. Well... if they like the boy, anyway."

She brushed her hair from her face again, then looked at me with something akin to suspicion.

"Like him how? Like, like?"

"Boyfriend, girlfriend."

"Oh."

She pondered this for a moment.

"I don't wanna. It's gross."

I was disappointed, but shrugged casually.

"Whatever. You don't have to do anything."

She continued trying to jerk my limp dick, and I suggested she fondle my balls a little; it took some guidance, but she eventually figured out how I wanted her to gently roll them back and forth in her hand. It didn't take long before my soldier was finally standing at attention.

I gave her some more guidance and she got back into the rhythm she'd developed yesterday, smoothly jerking my penis. I leaned back again and propped my head up under my arms, relaxed and enjoying the sensation. She looked at me, I smiled at her, she smiled back, then blushed and turned her gaze back to my penis, giggling.

"That's good, sweetie. You're doing great."

"It feels really good, right?"

"Very good. Keep going; I'll let you know when I'm about to orgasm."

It didn't take five whole minutes. Her arm was getting tired, but I kept her going by telling her she was "almost there". She wrapped both hands around my erect penis and began pumping faster, a look of intense concentration on her face.

There- that familiar pressure in my-

"Ok... here it comes..."

I grunted in sheer bliss, wonderful tingling shooting up and down my spine, as white semen spurted out in bursts. Sara was sitting right up against me on my side, and as she was jerking me off she had my penis pointed upward and toward her, so most of it landed on her lap and arms; some of the last of it dribbled onto her left hand, which was above her right and still wrapped firmly around my shaft.

"Eeeeeeew! It's all over me!"

It really was. She let go of my dick and held her arms up, looking at the thick, white substance slowly running down them, then down at her lap. I sat up to get a closer look; wow. It was splattered all over both thighs, and on her belly just above her crotch; as I watched, a glob of jizz made a thin trail as it slid down her mons pubis and dripped onto the wooden deck. Damn. That was the hottest thing I'd ever seen in my entire life. Not that, you know, I had all that much experience with sex, unless you count being intimately familiar with my hand, but damn.

"It's all warm! Ew, ew, ew!"

"Of course it's warm, silly. It was inside of me until just a few seconds ago!"

She touched some of the semen on her thigh with a finger and watched in both curious fascination and disbelieving disgust as it left a string from her thigh to her fingertip; then she smeared it around her fingertip with her thumb.

"It's all sticky, like snot! That is so gross!"

"It's not snot, and it's not gross. Girls like it."

She flashed a skeptical look and responded with, "nuh-uh!"

"They do. Girls like it."

She scooped up as much from her thighs as she could, holding it in her hand, then cautiously sniffed it.

"It smells weird! This stuff makes babies?"

"Yup."

"And girls are really supposed to like this?"

"Uh-huh."

Then I grabbed her hand and slapped it against her chest, covering her chest in my semen with a loud splattering sound.

"Hey!"

I laughed and she tried to slap me on the shoulder, but I rolled out of her reach and onto my feet. She stood up and looked down at herself, arms held away from her body.

"I'm all sticky! This stuff is so weird!"

Man. I may have spent the night tossing and turning in guilt and fear of the consequences, but right now... right now I couldn't give two shits. I was looking at a young girl with my semen all over her naked body, and it was glorious.

"Well, you know what?"

"What?"

"We'll just have to wash you off!"

She realized my intent and yelled "Nooo!" just as I lunged at her, lifted her in the air by her armpits, and tossed her, laughing, into the pond. I dove in after her and after she finished washing herself off, I lifted her up again and put her on my shoulders, making truck noises as we 'drove' around the pond. She giggled and shouted orders, sending me this way and that, and I marveled at the feeling of her bare crotch on my neck and shoulders.

Then she let out an indignant squawk when I dropped us both underwater.

We played around in the pond for a while longer, then got out and lay on the deck to dry again.

Finally dried, we put our shoes back on, gathered our muddy clothing, and headed back for camp. I tossed the muddy clothes into the trunk of my car, got out clean clothes and dressed myself, then handed her some clothes.

"We'll have to be careful not to get all muddy again; this is our last change of clothes until we get home."

She thought for a moment, then nodded and said, "ok" and headed back for the tent with her clothes in her arms. My interest piqued, I shut the trunk to my car and followed along behind her. When she got to the tent, she tossed her clothes on top of her blanket, then walked over and sat on the log by the cold fire ring.

"Aren't you going to get dressed?"

She shrugged and replied, "Nah. You said not to get dirty, so I don't want to get my clothes all dirty. And besides..."

She blushed, then looked around as if to see if anyone else were listening.

"I kinda like being naked outside. It feels nice. Y'know?"

She brushed her hair back out of her face again and looked at me as if expecting me to approve. Or maybe tell her to get dressed, because you weren't supposed to be running around in public naked. Which was pretty much exactly what we'd done all day.

"That's cool. There's no one around, so you do what you want."

She smiled at my approval.

"I like you. You're cool and you don't make me do stuff, like other grown ups."

I smiled back. That felt good. 'I like you'. That felt really good.

I sat down opposite her and lifted the grocery bag I'd retrieved from the tent.

"Wanna make s'mores?"


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FapArtist 13/09/29(Sun)07:15 No. 19800 ID: cf2048

I absolutely love this story. I've been following it since it started and I can't get enough. It seems so honest. Nothing feels like it was forced or shoved in to get audience approval. I'm not the biggest fan of the whole handjob scenario, but I wouldn't ask it to be any other way, either. You seem to know what you're doing with this story, so I'll just say that I can't wait until it's her turn to get some attention.


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Anonymous 13/09/29(Sun)07:33 No. 19801 ID: c1b02f

> Short answer: Yes. Long answer: Hell yes. Longer answer: I'm going to hell for this, but yes.

I laughed so hard i woke up my roommates.

Honestly OP this is fucking excellent, i would say it's better than 90% of the stories that get put on here just because of it's slow and story driven flow, with nothing feeling like it's awkward or out of place or rushed.

Excellent job OP, please keep going.


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Anonymous 13/09/29(Sun)10:07 No. 19802 ID: 8d95ca

>>19801
Exactly, it's not only good as porn, it's a wonderful piece of literature. OP, please, keep going.


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OP!!L1ZTV3LGZl 13/10/01(Tue)04:11 No. 19811 ID: 61bc43

The s'mores were good. Sara made a mess of herself, getting melted chocolate and bits of marshmallow all over her hands, face, and chest. She also set the first three marshallows she tried to roast on fire before I convinced her of the correct distance from the fire to hold them.

"Guess it's a good thing you didn't get dressed then; you're all messy again."

She laughed and nodded, inattentively cremating another marshmallow.

Once we'd had our fill of s'mores, I put some hot chocolate over the fire and told her she had time to wash up before it got hot. I glanced at the darkening sky and the sudden breeze blowing through the trees; there was a cold front coming, but it wasn't supposed to be here until late tomorrow.

We walked down to the pond, chatting about nothing consequential, and Sara sat on the dock, giving me a very pleasant view of her open crotch while she got her shoes and socks off. Then she stood and started to walk to the end of the dock, but before she could jump in I scooped her up from behind, pressed my lips against her belly, and blew.

"THHHHHPPPPPPPTTTBB!"

She cackled and squirmed out of my arms, but I grabbed her again and started tickling her ribs and belly. She shrieked and laughed, then twisted out of my reach and dove into the pond.

Surfacing, she stuck her tongue out at me. I couldn't follow, since I was fully clothed. She swam around a bit, then concentrated on washing the s'more debris off while I glanced pensively at the darkening sky and the huge thunderheads piling up in the distance. They were getting closer, and the wind was getting stronger. Maybe the weatherman was off a day.

Then again, when has the weatherman ever been right?

"Hey kiddo, better hop out and dry off. It looks like we're gonna get some bad weather soon."

She returned to the dock and I reached down and hauled her up by her hands, and she stood on the dock dripping wet, her pale skin covered in goosebumps, little pink nipples erect, and wet hair clinging to her head. She wrapped her arms around herself and shivered.

"It's freezing!"

It was pretty chilly, but more so for her since she was wet and standing in the wind. I looked up at the sky again and frowned.

"It looks like we're gonna get some rain soon. We'd better hurry back."

She trotted over to where she'd left her socks and shoes and started to sit down to put them on, but I interrupted.

"Don't waste time putting them on, just pick them up."

"But- if I go barefoot, the sticks and rocks and stuff hurt my feet."

"I'll carry you. C'mon. Let's get back in the tent before it rains."

I bent down and hefted her up, giving her a piggyback ride to the tent. She stuck her feet out in front of us and wiggled her toes, swinging a shoe in each hand, and hummed some tune while I carefully studied the feel of her damp crotch on the back of my neck.

It started raining before we reached the tent. Hard. It was freezing cold too. Sara shrieked at the sudden splash of cold water from the sky, and I broke into a run. We reached the tent and I basically tossed her into the tent and jumped inside to zip it shut before the tent was flooded by the downpour.

We spent a few minutes huddling in the tent, listening to the rain beat down on the nylon above us, while I took off my shoes to avoid tracking mud into the tent. Sara sat on her little mound of blankets and waited to dry off, still humming that song. It seemed vaguely familiar, but I couldn't place it.

As I sat there, listening to the rain and her humming, I glanced over at her. She sat with her knees, book between her feet, reading. I studied the pale, smooth, milky skin, the way her mosquito bite nipples stood out from the rest of her, the shape of her thin legs and the curve of her butt, the freckles sprinkled across her nose and upper cheeks like the first hints of the Milky Way appearing in the night sky, her damp hair clinging to her forehead...

Now, whether or not it was appropriate in any way, shape, or form to be sexually attracted to an 11 year old girl, she was pretty. She was definitely an eye-pleaser regardless of whether or not you lusted for her inappropriately.

We were alone, in the wilderness, with no around for miles, she was naked, and she had proved herself quite willing, or at least very curious. I wondered if I could take further advantage of that.

"Hey, Sara."

"Hmm?"

"You don't get sex ed until next year, right?"

"I think so. I dunno. We haven't had it yet though."

I casually asked, "So if you knew a lot of the stuff beforehand, do you think you'd make a better grade?"

She seemed to think about it for a moment, then nodded. That certainly made sense.

"So do you remember what all the parts are on a guy and what they do?"

"I think so."

"I dunno," I said, sounding skeptical. "I'm sure you'll remember. How about I quiz you?"

"Ok," she said, putting her book down and sitting up attentively.

I slid out of my pants, then got on my knees and pulled my boxes down to expose myself to her.

"So which one's the penis?"

She giggled and pointed.

"Ok, which part is the head?"

She pointed, and I pretended I couldn't tell what she was pointing at; she then reached out and poked it.

"Ok, so what's this part called?"

"The... shaft?"

"Mm-hm. So what's the penis do?"

"It gets all big and hard."

"What else?"

"And then it squirts that snotty stuff. Oh, and it pees too."

I smirked at that one.

"What's this part called?"

"The scrrrrr..... scretum?"

"Scrotum. What's inside it?"

"The testacles!" It rhymed with Hercules.

"Testicles," I corrected. "And what do they do?"

"They make the slimy stuff that squirts out when your penis feels really good."

"What's it called?"

"Uh..."

"Semen."

"Semen. Ok."

"And what's it for?"

"It makes babies!"

I pulled my boxers back up and patted her on the head as I sat down.

"Good job, kiddo. You know all the guy parts. What about the girl parts?"

She adopted a puzzle expression and scratched an itch on her back.

"The vagina?"

"Right, that's part of it. But do you know all the parts?"

"Girls have more parts?"

I laughed and she looked embarrassed.

"Of course. So you don't know what they all are?"

She shook her head.

"Here, I'll show you. Spread your legs."

She looked me in the eye and held me there for several long seconds. After a moment's hesitation, I saw nothing but trust in those deep, blue eyes. She immediately spread her legs apart and looked down at her own crotch in curiosity.

My heart was beating so fast I thought I was going to have a heart attack. It was all I could do to keep my hands from shaking in nervous excitement. I bent down to her level.

Her outer labia were smooth, without so much as a trace of peach fuzz, milky white, a freckle on the left lip. Just the tip of the clitoral hood or inner labia, I wasn't sure which, peeked out from between her lips. I gently reached out and touched one side of her labia, stroking its softness.

"This outside part is called the outer labia."

"Labia?"

"It's Latin for 'lips', 'cause they look like someone's lips, kinda."

"How do you know all that?"

I smiled at her and responded, "I'm a grown up. We know these things."

She smiled back.

"You're a cool grown up. You know all kinds of stuff."

We both returned out attentions to her privates and I gently parted her outer lips.

"Hold those open."

She reached down with both hands and pulled her labia aside, affording me a clear view of what was hidden inside her Venus' cleft.

It was pink and moist, and very clean looking. Much more so than in any adult porn I'd seen. The inner labia seemed to be vestigial only, a neat little arc on either side of her slit that met to form the little nub of her clitoral hood. I pressed my index finger against the opening of her holy-of-holies.

"Do you know what this is?"

"My... vagina?"

"Uh-huh. Do you know what it's for?"

"That's where I pee from, right?"

"Not even close, kiddo."

"Really?"

"Yep." I rubbed it with my fingertip, marveling at how I was really touching the entrance to... yeah, let's just skip the verbose descriptions, shall we?

"I didn't know that. I can't really see down there," she said, defensively. "So what's it for then?"

"Mmmm," I considered my responses, then went with, "It's complicated. You won't understand it all until you're older."

"Oh. So where do I pee from, then?"

I looked closely and... couldn't find it. I poked the general area of where it should be.

"It's a little hole there. And do you know what this is?" I was touching her hood now.

"Nuh-uh."

"That's your clitoris."

"My what?"

"Clitoris. It's a little bump that hides underneath this little fold of skin here."

"What's it do?"

"Well... you know how you can make me feel really good by touching my penis?"

"Yeah."

"The clitoris is sort of the same thing for girls."

"Really?"

"Yup. If a boy touches it just right, it feels really good."

She bent over and peered at her crotch, trying to get a good luck.

"You wanna try it?"

She met my eyes again; no suspicion, no disbelief, just childish curiosity. Which I was shamelessly taking advantage of.

"It feels good for girls like it does for you?"

"Yup."

"Ok!"

"All right, come sit in my lap."

She wiggled around into my lap, I leaned her back with me so we could both see, and she spread her legs for me. I wrapped my left around her waist and she clung onto it with both hands, while my right hand slid down to her crotch. I started gently rubbing her outer labia with my index and middle fingers. Man, she was silky soft.

"How's that feel?"

"It feels funny."

"Funny how?"

"It kinda tickles."

"Do you like it?"

She thought for a moment, then shrugged.

"I guess?"

I continued rubbing her labia for another minute or so, then gently parted her lips and rubbed my index finger up and down her slit. She made a sudden intake of breath.

"How's that?"

"It... tickles."

"Is that good, or bad?"

She didn't answer.

"Do you want me to keep going?"

She squirmed in my lap a little, then nodded, a blush spreading across her face.

I rubbed up and down her little slit for a while longer, then rubbed my finger in a shorter arc across her clitoris. When I got no overt reaction, I placed my finger directly on top of her hood and started rubbing in circles.

She squirmed and giggled.

"That tickles!"

I laughed with her and rubbed a little harder. She suddenly froze, a startled look on her face.

"Whoa."

"How's that feel?"

"It feels... weird."

"You want me to stop?"

She stayed frozen for a long moment, then nodded uncomfortably. I was disappointed, but I guess it was to be expected. I removed my hand from her crotch.

"Ok."

Then I hugged her with both arms and quietly spoke into her ear, "I just want you to feel as good as you made me feel."

She blushed a deeper red, turned around in my lap, and hugged me back. We held each other like that for a few seconds before I realized she was shivering.

"Are you cold?"

"Yeah."

"Better get dressed then, you don't want to catch a cold."

She got up, slid on her panties, night shirt, and socks, and burrowed under the blankets. Come to think of it, I was getting pretty chilly too. I folded back my sleeping bag and slid inside, then zipped it up.

We both lay there, reading by our flashlights, listening to the steady drumbeat of heavy rain and the rumble of approaching thunder. I glanced at my watch; if it weren't raining, it'd be getting dark right about now.

"I'm cold."

"Here, c'mere kiddo."

I unzipped my sleeping bag, grabbed the pad underneath her and her nest of blankets and slid the entire assembly over next to me. Then I wrapped one arm around the bundle of blankets with her inside and scooted her into the sleeping bag with me and zipped it back up.

"Better?"

"Yeah."

We read for a while longer, until I noticed she had dozed off and I set her book and flashlight aside. She sleepily wiggled deeper into her nest of blankets so only a bit of light brown hair poked out and then lay still. I smiled to myself as I brushed my hand through her hair, gently so as not to wake her. Then I turned off my flashlight and lay there in the dark.

You know how cartoons have that little angel that stands on your shoulder and encourages you to resist temptation? I didn't hear a peep out of that guy the entire time I was fondling a little girl's crotch. As soon as I turned the light out, the little bastard jumped out and was yelling, "That was wroooooong, mister!"

Hey, asshole, where were you when all this started? He was jerking off while I got a handjob and fondled a little girl, that's what. Then as soon as I'm alone, more or less, he does his best to make me feel like a guilty piece of shit.

Well, I guess that's what I was.

And once again, I lay there in the dark, feeling guilty and afraid, hating myself for what I'd done.

Thunder boomed in the distance.


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Anonymous 13/10/01(Tue)07:22 No. 19812 ID: c1b02f

My god, two updates in as many days? Am i dead? Is this heaven? This is the best update so far! I must be dead, this is too good.

In the off chance that i'm not, GOOD GOD OP that was amazing! I came buckets. Now.... i want.... moar....


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Anonymous 13/10/01(Tue)08:01 No. 19815 ID: 9289e6

Nice update! Keep it up, please!


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Anonymous 13/10/01(Tue)10:01 No. 19817 ID: 06ca2b

It took a while but this thread is really paying off. Cheers OP


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Anonymous 13/10/03(Thu)17:55 No. 19831 ID: 332f1f

Started from the bottom now we here

In all honesty though I have grown to appreciate these characters and I'm excited to see the next update

Thanks OP!


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Anonymous 13/10/03(Thu)19:26 No. 19833 ID: 495bcd

godam op this is the best elit i've read since i discovered anonympc 3 years ago ... that's the highest complement i can give really


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OP!!L1ZTV3LGZl 13/10/04(Fri)03:21 No. 19834 ID: 61bc43

So what do you like most about the story, and what do you like least? Gimme some criticism so I know what works and what doesn't.

Also, I'm not going on sabbatical until I finish the camping trip, for those who are curious.


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Waxing Carnauba 13/10/04(Fri)05:45 No. 19838 ID: a73f5c

>>19834

What works best for your story? Your restraint towards the start has been ridiculous. This has been such a slow burn that I was suspicious (and many were convinced) that you were trolling, and that you were just going to build and build and build, and all of a sudden we'd get a post that says "And then I went home", and never hear from you again.

What worked against you in this story? Your restraint towards the start has been ridiculous. This has been such a slow burn that I was suspicious (and many were convinced) that you were trolling, and that you were just going to build and build and build, and all of a sudden we'd get a post that says "And then I went home", and never hear from you again.

Seriously, though--a great quote I recall reading from Alfred Hitchcock says "There's no terror in the bang; only in the anticipation of it." It's the same for passion and desire; the more slow and subtle the journey, the more epic the climax.

Mind you, keeping with the Hitchcock quote, there's no terror in aftermath, either; now that you're rolling down Badtouch Gorge towards Lake Boomchicka Bwah-Bwah, you probably should assess where you want to go when you're through. Make it sappy and turn it into a 'forbidden love' drama? Take a dark turn and make it a 'corruption of innocence/spiral into depravity' tale? Turn it sad and make the rest of the story a cautionary tale about someone from the outside catching wind and the main character trying to continue his romance while his life (and hers) spirals down the drain and is ultimately destroyed?

These would all be entertaining stories, but none of them are the one you've been writing. In fact, the more I think about it, the more I realize:

Your tale--the crawling sprawling glorious torture that you've inflicted upon this board for almost a year now--ends at the bang.


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Anonymous 13/10/04(Fri)07:28 No. 19839 ID: c1b02f

>>19834

For one, i love the realism. Sara just comes off as such an authentic little girl of her age, especially her reactions in the latest chapters. Our protagonist doesn't seem so fleshed out to me, but only because the story is told strictly through his perspective. I still don't know what he was going to college for (that may be my fault for not remembering) what his dreams are, maybe past loves shit like that. This in no way detracts from the story i still absolutely love it just some character backstory that may be added.

The only real gripe i have is the depictions of Sara, it just seems like there could be alot of fap worthy fleshing out of the nude scenes of her.

> yeah, let's just skip the verbose descriptions, shall we?

No, let's not, that's exactly why we come to this board lol.


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Anonymous 13/10/04(Fri)07:36 No. 19840 ID: 41a1eb

I get this weird feeling like the reason there was such a long break in the writing is that nothing much was happening in the authors life and that the reason for this big burst of content is that he recently went on a camping trip.

But that's just silly.

This is purely fiction.


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OP!!L1ZTV3LGZl 13/10/04(Fri)15:10 No. 19844 ID: 61bc43

>>19840

The story resembles my real life in no way, shape, or form.


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Anonymous 13/10/05(Sat)21:13 No. 19860 ID: 4fa9bd

>>19834
You are a god in earth and I thank you for this glorious narrative, but please do describe more the situation, the sensations and the feelings, it's just what it makes it perfect.


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Anonymous 13/10/07(Mon)08:29 No. 19868 ID: 4b7790

>>19840
So Silly. Why would you think something like that?


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SB Hkahs 13/10/07(Mon)09:18 No. 19869 ID: 934682

Havsb



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