>>21562


I know why you're doing it, but it was kinda short. Not really long enough to fap to. While I can appreciate building suspense, I'm sad panda for waiting longer for part two of this post. :(

Please, make my weiner happy.

Yeah, feels like it's getting a bit stale. I understand the slow pace and the build up, but this felt like filler. Not a lot of originality, basically a repeat of an earlier chapter in an effort to segway into what I assume will finally be the reciprocation to her. While it's not bad, it's definitely not on par with the rest of the story thus far. And while I understand it was meant to be a "teaser" it came off more as a disappointment. For it to have been a true teaser, I feel like more efforts should have been out in.

Well, you can't really know that. We have no idea what is in store. Granted, she will more then likely go a little further this time, we have no idea just HOW far that is. Not to mention the whole drops leading to a flood thing that was mentioned earlier in the story. That's just my opinion though, I'm not trying to call anyone an asshole. In any case, I have no problems with the writing, I think it's great OP!!.

I keep checking back here every day for part two....

>>21588
same...

>>21588
yep....

What was the other story he said he was working on?

Thanks, OP. Don't be discouraged by some of the criticism here, you should focus on whatever is happening in your life. An untroubled OP is a good OP.

Also, don't die. Please.

>>21588
Mmmhmm.

You know what I just realized. This fucker hasn't even KISSED her yet! (on the lips of course.)

>>21600


So does he have the next part ready and just isn't posting, or... what?

>>21636
That sums up the situation nicely.

>>21636
>>21638
In other words: Yes.

Honesty, who WOULDN'T get a kick out of making their fans wait? NO ONE, that's who. That is the way that writers work, have worked, and always WILL work.

I wasn't saying that the story isn't good. I was just offering constructive criticism. Believe it or not that is what makes a good writer. He has had tons of positive feedback and with that he has continued on using things that we have all express positive feedback to. While negative feedback may not be as easy to hear, it is equally as important. Maybe I represent the minority, or maybe there are others that agree. Maybe even OP to some extent and with that information goes in to produce an amazing next chapter.

>>21646
I've been a vocal supporter of this story since the first chapter, and I'm with this guy.

>>21651
I don't think there is any harm in giving constructive criticism. Anyone who is ready to show other people their work needs to be ready to hear ways that they can improve. My big issue is that I'd like so see more, because the last section was very, very short. It's good stuff, but it was barely enough to fap to.